The Official Writing Challenge
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04/21/16
Great job!

Well done,

Blessings~
04/22/16
Great story. I noticed some verb tense changes throughout the story. You need to be careful of those. Overall, good job.
04/23/16
Dramatic and suspenseful storytelling. Good visualization of the main character.

I noticed you changed from past tense to present tense several times throughout the story. Your one sentence should read: ...with any luck he'd be a living and breathing rich man.

04/28/16
Congrats!

Blessings~
04/28/16
Congratulations, Don, on your highly commendable award in the Beginners category.