The Official Writing Challenge
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03/04/16
Prayer...a great beginning to a new day... during the day...and to end the day!

Great message.

Blessings~
03/04/16
I liked how you introduced God as a friend with who you liked to share the day.

I confess I was a little confused at the end of the story. First you talked about being immersed in the Spirit, and then you talked about taking prayer for granted.

Great message overall.
03/05/16
Notice in the first phrase, "Sunlight flooded my room as I open my eyes." you shift the reader from the past (flooded) to the present (open). Be careful to keep in the same tense, so to phrase it "Sunlight floods my room as I open my eyes." Notice when and where these shifts in the story takes place and adjust accordingly....