The Official Writing Challenge
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02/26/16
This is a heartwarming story told in a very clear manner. Great message too!
02/26/16
First para. is all telling. You had room to show us more. You had some good descriptions. The paragraphing could use some work. All of this said, it was a great testimony of God's care.
03/01/16
I'm glad the MC learned such a valuable lesson.

You need to double space between dialogue.