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01/28/16
This was so touching and well written, straight from the heart.

Nicely done.

God bless~
01/28/16
Ah - I enjoyed this sweet, tender story. Thanks for writing this.You have a way of touching the heart - keep writing.
01/30/16
The least "valuable" things often have the most precious memories. It is just sad that we can lose our memories to such horrific diseases like Alzheimer's.

Nice job!
Beautifully written. I felt the tears brimming as I read on as my own Nanna died from Alzheimers. Indeed it is often the little things in life that become the most important.
God bless xo
01/31/16
I am so glad you are going to pass down these treasures and the memories attached to them to your grandchildren. Let them know how special Opa and G.G. are. The most
important news was that your dad accepted Christ before he died, and that now you will have an eternity of special times.

This is a heartwarming story.

There were a couple of grammatical errors, but they did not detract from the telling of the tale.
02/02/16
The structure of this piece is lovely, with a seamless flashback to when you found the disassembled shadowbox back to the present-day conversation with your little granddaughter.

At first, I didn't care for the disclaimer in your first sentence, but on a second reading, I've changed my mind--I think it adds to the cross-generational theme of the piece, which now contains glimpses of both past, present, and future.

There are minor errors in punctuation and a few other spots that could be tweaked, but these do not detract from the overall effectiveness of this charming piece.

I especially appreciated the voice of the little girl--some people tend to make children overly sentimental and idealized, but this child's preoccupation with her Opa's 'brown teeth' is exactly the way that young children think and speak.

Your writing has authentic voice, and with a bit of polish, I'd expect to see you move up in the ranks here at FaithWriters.
A well written family story with emotions of both sadness and happyness and hope showing throughout.

If this is your style of writing, keep at it.

Good work.
02/04/16
Congratulations on your highly commended story in the Beginners category.

Your story was a great intergenerational piece.