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11/19/15
This was powerful. I admit I was a bit thrown off by your use of an apostrophe with the word "Thine", but otherwise I enjoyed it very much
11/23/15
You have a lovely way with words on this piece, although tense is an issue in places. Good job.
11/23/15
You have a wonderful way with words and phrases. I'm not sure I'm the one to critique this.

I did enjoy reading it. Thanks for sharing.
It's a pretty entertaining piece. You might watch your descriptors and subject/verb combinations. One example is "wistful wind". Wind cannot be wistful and in "scarlet lamp hath changed it's mind", a lamp cannot change its mind.
This is so relevant. The Bible has a lot to say about magic and the occult, and there's no middle ground from God's perspective. Stirring depiction. Thanks!