The Official Writing Challenge
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10/23/15
A very good review of the truth. I did see several spelling errors, but they do not reduce the effectiveness of this story. Keep writing!
10/25/15
You certainly put a lot of work into your entry. Interesting to read.

I did notice comma errors throughout your story. I suggest you check out Jan's Writing Basics on the Forum. These have been very enlightening to me, and I am sure you will as well.

Keep writing.
You have a lot of good Bible facts scattered throughout your article.

I would like to comment on one sentence. You wrote: "When we receive Christ as our savior it’s not over, just beginning." Peter said in (Acts 2:36) that God made Him (Jesus) both Lord and Christ (Savior). We have to make Jesus our Lord first by making him our master (Lord). We do this by obedience to what he desires for us. About 3,000 received the words Peter spoke and to show that Jesus was both their Lord and Savior, they were baptized. (Acts 2:41) verses 41 through 48 have more of how they lived after that.