The Official Writing Challenge
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10/15/15
What an interesting take on the subject! You gave an excellent description of the creepy opponent; I like your way of painting a picture with your words. Good story
10/15/15
I found all the extra ssss, ... etc. distracting but I know that you were trying to get across the guy's way of speaking and the rhythm of the speaker. BTW measily doesn't have an "I".
10/16/15
Clever ending. The character's personalities come through.