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TITLE: The Wedding Angels | Previous Challenge Entry
By LeslieJean Anderson
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I frowned at the co-worker who said this to me and mumbled something about needing rest not a social life. Maybe she meant well, but she didn’t understand. I never expected to marry again, after what had happened. And I didn’t want a boyfriend. It was too dangerous, unpredictable and risky for a single mother with four children.
Instead, the children and I got active in school and church activities. We were a very busy family. I joined a 12-step group for families and focused on helping hurting people find hope. As I reached out to God more, He seemed to move closer to me.
One night I had a dream. I was in a bright white room all by myself. I was happy there. I did not feel alone because I knew that God was also in that room. But then something outside that room tried to pull me out. Like a giant magnet, a powerful force tried to suck me through the walls of my sacred room. I fought against it with all my might, crying out to God to keep me in His Presence. Then the force stopped. When I finally woke up, my vision had clarified. It was like I had emerged from a gray tunnel into a brightly lighted room.
One day not long after that dream, I was preparing for our support group and I noticed a dignified man peering through the doorway. I offered him some coffee and he sat down across the table from me. By the end of the meeting, I sensed something significant had happened. And suddenly I remembered my recent heartfelt prayer.
“Dear God,” I had prayed. “I am happy with you alone. But if a partner is Your Will for me, then please choose a Godly man and place him directly in front of me so I do not rush past him and miss the Blessing.” In my heart I doubted it would happen, because only an angel could take on my large family and help me cope with the left-over divorce drama.
But every week after that, this quiet stranger always found the chair across the table from me, and I began to look forward to his blue-eyed gaze. I found myself smiling at him. When I heard his story, my heart was touched, and then we discovered we had friends in common. Those friends seemed delighted that we had found each other. How had we lived in the same town for all those years and never met?
That was because he had been doing the same thing I had been doing – seeking healing by choosing actions that brought him closer to God. He was the Godly man in my prayer.
Soon we were engaged, and he took to calling me Angel. I would reply by running my hands across his shoulders and laugh, “I’m looking for your hidden Angel wings, since it takes one to know one!”
Our wedding took place just before Christmas, and late that night after a long drive we burst into the lobby of our hotel, still chattering excitedly about the wedding. We were giddy newlyweds as we checked in as Mr. and Mrs. But as we turned from the hotel desk and headed for the elevators, the exquisite Christmas décor of the lobby stopped us in our tracks.
We were surrounded by Christmas angels. The huge Christmas tree was decorated with angels. The lobby and the halls were decorated with dozens of large life-like angels. They had huge soaring wings and thick gold sparkling sashes that wound around their teeny-tiny waists and then floated away into space. Petite little faces framed with clouds of billowing hair seemed to beam down at us from every corner of the hotel lobby. We couldn’t see how they were suspended. They seemed to float in midair.
“Well, Darling,” grinned my new husband, “Looks like some of our relatives are here to welcome us.”
We called them the “Wedding Angels.”
Over the next few days we wandered the spacious and elegant hotel, taking our meals there and posing for pictures with those angelic figures. On that same date for the next twenty years we would check into that same hotel to celebrate our Anniversary in the presence of our happy memories and our Wedding Angels.
For prompt CHECKING IN OR OUT (hotel/motel on vacation)
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(Note: This is a work of non-fiction.)
09/01/15
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Great job.
God bless~
My biggest suggestion would be to do more showing and less telling by including body language, dialog and thoughts. For example: My coworker nudged me with her elbow. "Girl, you need to get out...”
Frowning, I dipped my head and tried not to cry. No one understands. I'm raising four kids on my own; I need a rest not a social life. I keep telling her I don't want a boyfriend. I've been there, done that, and never want to get married again. I know she means well, but still...
That's just an example of how you can include the back story little by little while doing more showing than telling. I like your MC and think you did a nice job of giving the reader a glimpse into how difficult it can be for single mom's. I love the way God gives us what we need, not what we want. Your ending was beautiful and I do believe God sends us angels whether they be corporeal or angels hanging on a tress. You did a great job.
Congratulations on your second place win in the beginner category.
What a beautifully written story. Weddings always make me cry. Surrounding angels.
Thank you for sharing your writing talents
I am glad God always has a plan for our lives. It might not be in our timing, but God's love is always evident.