The Official Writing Challenge
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08/23/15
I liked how the pictures revealed your Oahu vacation.

I noticed a few run-on sentences and a couple of places where commas were needed.

Parallel structure (same form of verbs):

Those incidents forced us to pull together in a strange place, to work as a team, and to provide us with lots of good conversation.
08/24/15
I thought it was well written with the few corrections noted by the earlier reviewer.
08/27/15
Congratulations on your highly commended award in the Beginner's category.
Congratulations on your highly commendable award. I really liked the pictures you painted of Pearl Harbor and Waikiki Beach.