The Official Writing Challenge
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08/23/15
I liked your beginning and ending lines. That first tour guide was quite the shyster.

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Besides, the admission tickets were priced lower if we bought them ourselves.

He spoke the language that touched our hearts; he told us several jokes about the local cultures.

he said,

This young tour guide had indeed become firmly etched in my memory.
08/24/15
food was more tasty, not were; speak well of him, not speaks. interesting comparison
08/26/15
Good job :-) thank God for that second tour guide! I liked the story the second one told, it added a touch of authenticity and personality to the story :-)
I really enjoyed this - well written, beautifully communicated message, and if I do ever go anywhere with a tour guide, I'll be careful. But seriously, this was a very good piece. Well done!
08/27/15
Congratulations on your highly recommended story in the Beginner's category!
Congratulations on your honorable mention in the beginner category. The beginning paragraph drew me into the story right away. I thought the piece was creatively written. It goes to show that you need to be vigilant in choosing your tour guides.