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I liked your beginning and ending lines. That first tour guide was quite the shyster.

Besides, the admission tickets were priced lower if we bought them ourselves.

He spoke the language that touched our hearts; he told us several jokes about the local cultures.

he said,

This young tour guide had indeed become firmly etched in my memory.
food was more tasty, not were; speak well of him, not speaks. interesting comparison
Good job :-) thank God for that second tour guide! I liked the story the second one told, it added a touch of authenticity and personality to the story :-)
I really enjoyed this - well written, beautifully communicated message, and if I do ever go anywhere with a tour guide, I'll be careful. But seriously, this was a very good piece. Well done!
Congratulations on your highly recommended story in the Beginner's category!
Congratulations on your honorable mention in the beginner category. The beginning paragraph drew me into the story right away. I thought the piece was creatively written. It goes to show that you need to be vigilant in choosing your tour guides.