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This was such a beautiful and touching story. My own heart ached at your pain as you told of your daughter's journey but the ending gave hope of the light of Christ shining in her sapphire eyes. I believe if you hit the preview on the story befoe you submit it, you could have your story spaced correctly. Thank you for opening that box.
07/24/15
The next to last sentence in the first paragraph ends with a preposition. That's a no no, and you don't really need the "of" anyway. It was a sad and beautiful story, and I'm glad that hope is coming back to you. God bless you!
07/25/15
This was touching and poignant.The emotions and the anguish was palpable throughout this piece. The mourning and longing for her child excruitatingly painful, however...the end fileld our hearts with comfort. To realize she is with our Lord and that you'll meet again one day, this time for eternity, brings the true meaning of Christianity to the core.

I hope this wasn't a true story...but it had such an authentic tone. If so, my heart goes out to you.

God bless~
07/25/15
This story was really a tear jerker. It was well-written and reflected the deep anguish of a mother losing a child.
07/26/15
This is such a touching narrative. I felt the pain of a mother, the sorrow that death brings and understand how you were able to put your grief on paper. Very well written.
07/30/15
Congratulations on your 1st place award in Beginners!
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 12th overall! The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
07/31/15
Amanda,
Congratulations on your touching story! I'm so happy for you...this was an excellent entry, so glad it received the blue ribbon.

God bless~