The Official Writing Challenge
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07/10/15
A good message in your entry. Well done.
God bless~
This is really quite lovely and a wonderful message is included in the words. In my humble opinion, I think you may have missed the topic. Though lovely and thought-provoking, you never really talked about an actual vacation even though you mentioned the word holiday. If you were to take that one line out, I think it would be difficult to see a vacation in your piece, which is a great way to judge if an entry is on topic. With that said, I also believe that it's more important to write about what God calls you to write. And while life may not be a holiday, it is definitely a road trip. We all know the road to Heaven is narrow and difficult. I especially liked how you showed that Jesus does understand us. He's traveled on this earth and feels our pain and joy. Your words touched my heart.