The Official Writing Challenge
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This is cute!

My only critique, and it's a small one, is Jimmy's last name. It's a bit of groaner, and a bit too obvious. Give him a general last name, or a funny one that ties in later. Jimmy Club, perhaps. :)

This reminded me of "The Screwtape Letters." Nice job!
Clever, and very nicely done. I liked especially the part from the demons' perspective.
Congratulations on your second place win!! I hope you continue to write.

God Bless
Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 17 overall! Happy Dance!