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03/19/15
What a beautiful love story!
Thanks for sharing. The gift of love is priceless.

God bless~
This is really sweet. I think you did a wonderful job of showing your family's love for one another. You are blessed to have so many people love you so fiercely.

I noticed you switched your tense around some, starting with the past, then switching to the present, then back again. Also, only capitalize words like grandmother when using them as a name. If you have an article like my or the in front of it, then it's a common noun and should not start with a capital. For example: My grandmother was a lovely lady. She treated Grandpa with love.

I could feel your love as I read this beautiful tribute. I think you did a great job and this piece will be something your family will always treasure. I also liked the Bible verses you chose. They weren't the typical ones that many others used so it made it fresh and interesting. I think your ending brought the story full circle. Nice job.
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