The Official Writing Challenge
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Liked it. Flowed well. Gentle presentation. Applicable to lots of other situations as well.
A very gentle and sweet piece.
I like the message. Add some white space to improve readability.
I always feel slightly disoriented when a piece begins with a pronoun without an antecedent. Who is she?

I like the way you portrayed her spiritual revelation, though. Very relatable.
A good story line, though a little hard to follow. Seperations in the dialog as well as spacing between the paragraphs would make it more readable. A little edit and it would be great.
Since Writers write for Readers, it would be best if you could make it easier for them to read by putting spaces between paragraphs; thus, making more of an impact with each new paragraph. Otherwise, nice Spring story.