The Official Writing Challenge
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01/15/15
Excellent job with the topic, well written. Great ending, loved the important wrap up!

God bless~
I enjoyed this little essay on lust and how Satan uses it. You have a subtle sense of humor that made me smile. I can tell you have a personal relationship with God. The go God line made me smile.

I'd urge you to watch the change in your voice and try to be more consistent instead of switching from first person singular to second person, and back to first, but this time plural. In one line, you switched the voice in the middle. You could easily fix it like this; When I look at the happenings in today's world , I am sure that it is no the lust of the flesh - that craving for sensual gratification - will be the ultimate destroyer. I kept the voice in first person singular and tightened up some of the phrasing to help it be easier to understand.

I liked the Bible verse you used. It really backs up your message and makes the reader stop and think. That's always a good thing. You definitely nailed the topic. Good job.
01/22/15
Congrats,
God bless~