The Official Writing Challenge
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12/11/14
Thank you for giving us a glimpse of your family in this well written biographical account.

WEll done.

God bless~
12/12/14
Was good to see how grounded the main characters were. So good to know where you come from
12/16/14
Not bad! I enjoyed it. But why was this marked as fiction? And who's David? Did you once say that used to be your name? Anyway, I have no suggestions as of now. You really know how to make the reader feel like they're there. It's great to have you on board faithwriters.
12/18/14
Congrats,

God bless~
12/18/14
Congrats on placing with your first entry! Very nice!
12/28/14
I really like your writing style - like you know how to take a reader for a narrative ride. You quickly bring characters to life. If these characters are real, you did a good job rendering them - if they are fictitious, you did an excellent job making them seem real.

I was disappointed not to know what "Pops" meant in saying to David that he'll need a lot of therapy and what writing his story had to do with it. Because you chose to include this in the piece, I had an expectation of finding resolve within the piece. Pops's statements aroused a lot of curiosity!

Congrats!
01/25/15
That was brilliant. It is undeniable you have a gift. Wonderfully engagingly easy to read, your natural ability shines. Wow. You'll have your readers wanting more.