The Official Writing Challenge
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11/20/14
Mesmerizing! Great close!

God bless~
A very interesting "first chapter" to a story if Adam had added at the end: "I wonder if we will every meet him again on our journey".

The transitions from chapter to chapter can make or break the book.

Good writing.
11/21/14
Nice! I thought that was very enjoyable. It makes me curious to know what happens next... :)
11/24/14
Good writing. We have to keep focussed, especially in our spiritual adventure to accomplish our goals.
Leaving the identity of the trapper unknown does whet the appetite for more, even if it is intended as allegory of Satan's traps.
11/28/14
Congrats!
God bless~