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This was such a good read...well done. I enjoyed it and it kept me riveted throughout.

God bless~
Whoa! The scope of your writing is beautiful.
Think about writing a novel with this subject matter.
You created a real atmosphere and I felt for your MC and her father. The only little bit of red ink I have is, in your first line, you said, 'The year was', but the piece was written in present tense. I agree though with others that you could turn this into a novel; this really felt like a tantalising glimpse of the novel it could become one day. Thank you for sharing.
These reads like a young aristocratic woman's diary - which gives a real authenticity, and urgency to the harrowing narrative. I really felt like I was "in the moment" feeling along with the MC, and afraid for her. People have commented it should be a novel - a testament to the fact that we all want to know what happens next. Well done. I hope you are taking full advantage of writing classes that will enhance your descriptive characterizations and period settings.