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08/16/14
This story is a valuable true life commentary, which portrays the long range effects of a bad parent. You did well at relating the story. It might make it even more appealing to show the emotions through not only the dialogue, but the character's body postures and facial expressions. For example, flaring nostrils and red face for anger. Quivering limbs and hair standing on end for fear, etc. etc. Help us see what your character sees, smells, hears and feels.

Hope that helps in some way. Keep submitting entries, you definitely have the knack!
08/16/14
It's amazing how God sends the right "partner" as in your case. The two of your together in a marriage will each offer an essential part of past which will bring you through the future.

Your husband sounds like an excellent Godly man and you sound like a wonderful caring woman.

Thanks for sharing your story, which was written masterfully, and completely nailed the topic in the process.

God bless~
08/16/14
It's amazing how God sends the right "partner" as in your case. The two of your together in a marriage will each offer an essential part of past which will bring you through the future.

Your husband sounds like an excellent Godly man and you sound like a wonderful caring woman.

Thanks for sharing your story, which was written masterfully, and completely nailed the topic in the process.

God bless~
08/16/14
Praise God for allowing you to see beyond the errors of your step-father. So many young women fall into their mother's mis-steps...same with young men.

To those of us who are parents, this reminds us of how important it is to display Godly parenting because our children are watching.

Thank you for that. And your writing was excellent!
Well written life story.

Many can learn from the good and the bad of this story.

More similar to this can be a help to many.
08/21/14
Congrats!

God bless~
08/21/14
Congratulations!

This was a captivating piece that truly demands attentions. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.