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I totally enjoyed this. You did a great job of grabbing my attention right at the beginning. I was intrigued with the conflict and could feel the pain of both characters. The ending was lovely and you did a great job of writing on topic.
Nice story-telling. Good use of the topic.
Compelling story and a great use of the topic. Tugged at my heart. Good job:)
I would have liked to have seen a little more interaction between Jason and his mom in the middle of the "speech" but hey, the limitations of 750 words are sometimes daunting! Good story.
This really hit home. It is beautiful an touching.
Very touching. Ends the way I would like to see between my prodigal son and I. :)
Your descriptions in the first two paragraphs easily lead us into your short story.

A mother or our Father can carry grief and longing for a child to return. It is up to the child to make that decision. A mother can only pray. Our Father sent his Son to make a way for a child to come back.

Develop your descriptions so they are intermingled with the rest of the story setting.
I enjoyed your story very much. I have seven children and have experienced just what you wrote about. No heartbreak is so daunting as a child going astray. Good job. Keep up the good work.
Excellent job. I was drawn in and really enjoyed the entire piece. Well done.

God bless~

God bless~