The Official Writing Challenge
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02/06/14
This is such a warm story. The love the MC felt from those around him, the beloved nick-name, and the positive message it offers.

There seems to be a little time-lapse however. The MC was having nightmares two months after his father's death...then close to the end, after explaining that the father saved some puppies, the paragraph opens with "That Evening," was it the same evening the father died? or was it the evening after the night of bad dreams? If it's the latter then it makes me wonder why would they wait two months to give him the dog?

It was a lovely story overall. I like the name "Toe Top" and I like the use of the topic. Keep writing.
02/06/14
This pulled at my heartstrings! Well done, and well written in content and delivery.

I loved the ending!

Great job.

God bless~
An interesting story. Nicely written.

I felt that a better place for the paragraph about how Toe Tops got his name should have been place more towards the first of the story. (This was an interesting source for the name.)

a story easy to read.
02/13/14
I think you have a talent for telling this special kind of story. A "Legend" type of tale that leaves the reader wanting to know more and keep reading.

Your writing is very good! Keep up the good work.