The Official Writing Challenge
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Loved Thomas's innocent misunderstanding 'are they killing cats down there?'
Sweet. Good writing.
Reminds me when i was young, i used to wonder a lot.

Nice!
That was fun. I must have engaged well as I had a moment of thinking the aunt was a bit severe with the number of days Thomas had to spend in curfew. That, they say, is a sign of 'grabbing the reader's attention'. It may have strung the story out a bit, slowed the passing landscape of words had you spaced it a little more- only a thought.
10/21/13
Very interesting tale indeed! Good job with your entry and the topic.

God bless~
Nicely done. An enjoyable read, and a good verse to remember.
I enjoyed this. You grabbed my attention with the little guy's complaint and drew me into the story. You did a nice job of developing the topic in a fun and fresh way.

A good proofread might help you catch little errors like missing quotation marks and lines like this: you may come out to eat with us at the table and the bathroom (it makes it sound like he can eat at the table and the bathroom :)

Overall, I enjoyed this. I loved the subtle humor and I really liked that the boy resolved the conflict by himself (with help from God) You did a great job on this story.
10/24/13
Congratulations! God bless~
10/24/13
Congratulations!

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