The Official Writing Challenge
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Good conversation to tell the story.

Nicely put together.
Good story, I like the message it carries.

Let me share what I learnt in my writing classes from the forum with you. Dialogue flow much better with limited dialogue-tags (He said, she said), especially if its apparent to the reader who is talking.
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