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08/22/13
A good devotional--I've not been present at the death of a loved one, but I believe you've captured that sense of suspension very well.

It appears that you had some words to spare--I wonder if this would have been even more effective if you'd opened with a narrative about your experience with an actual loved one, told like a story. It might have made your devotional even more relatable to your readers.

Also, if you manually add a space while your entry is in the 'submit' box, your entry will be easier on the eyes.

The message at the end was pitch-perfect. Well done.
08/22/13
This was a powerful devotional with a superb message...especially the ending.

Thank you. God bless~