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Touching, tug at the heartstrings piece you've written here. You didn't say if it was a true story, but it could have been in today's heavy world for teens. You did a nice job involving the reader in seeing the situation through the eyes of the MC. I felt her fatigue, as well as her anxiety about making the doctor's appointment. Nice job.
You did an excellent job with the building of tension, right away. And, the internal dialogue was realistic, as well as the situation facing the young teen. This story had an authentic tone.

God Bless~
I love the story you've written here of an exhausted teacher reaching out to encourage a struggling teen mom. When we're at the end of our strength, God is more than willing and able to supply our need.
Congrats! God bless~
Great story Renee, well-written.