The Official Writing Challenge
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Very interesting explanation for the Biblical reference. And, a very well written story. Nicely told, and nicely done.

God bless~
Very moving and special story. Keep writing.
I really like the idea behind your story. I found it a clever way to look at the bright side.

You seem to have some problems with the punctuation rules. I'd recommend investing in a good book like Strunk's Element of Style. It was a bit hard to figure out who was speaking. You may want to include some action with the dialog for example: I patted her hand. "I'm sorry, what was your name?" That would show the reader who is speaking while giving insight to the fact that she was trying to comfort her by patting her hand.

I really like how this piece made me stop and think. How often do parents feel a sense of relief because their children are in prison and are likely to be safer in there than out doing what they were before. This would be a great story to polish up and use for the Prison Ministry.