The Official Writing Challenge
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I have the music going in my head...with a piano the primary piece! Beautiful and powerful. Thanks.

God Bless~
Beautiful and on topic. I enjoyed this piece.
Very nice!!
This says so much in so few words. I know that hole feeling, I think we all have experienced grief in one way or another. You did it quite elegantly
Reading this poem reminded me of a dream I had last night. I had almost forgotten it.

I hope you get to sing this. Very nice job.
Very powerful. I love the 'falling through' the holes in the heart. So expressive.
Good job and on topic. I too would like to hear it sung. KEEP WRITING!
God seems so silent, or maybe He's gone
Dead as the hopes that I once relied on
Draining away out the very same holes
Where I already lost you

The deep emotion of this piece rings out through every beautiful, heart-wrenching lyric. The part that I quoted above really touches me, because I think it eloquently portrays how most people feel, at least at first, whenever they lose someone that they dearly love. They feel that since their loved one is gone, perhaps God has left them as well. How wonderful to know that no matter what (or who) we lose or how low we get, our God will never leave us.

Inspiring! Very well done!
Nicely done. I trust the Lord will provide an inspired score of music, too.
This is excellent poetry...Im a novice but I got it completely. loved it.
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level one!