The Official Writing Challenge
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03/10/12
Oh my heavens! That poor MC that was some predicament!

Good job with this. I enjoyed this clever entry.

God bless~
This story was certainly on topic. You have a wonderful way of painting a picture for the reader. I noticed in the beginning you didn't capitalize the word Office. Later on you did catch it. It's a little thing but is something a good proofreader would catch. You took the story full circle and wrapped it up nicely. I enjoyed reading it and chuckled throughout.
03/13/12
This was a darling story; one I could relate to. I found a couple places that commas used were not in their proper place and it made the sentence not read as I'm sure you had wanted. Toward the end of the story, you seemed to be jumping from one tense to another and it did not make for a smooth read; however, I giggled through this story because you made it sound so real. Good story!
03/15/12
Congratulations!

Blessings~