The Official Writing Challenge
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Very well done! Great job!
The Alpha course is amazing and this story embodies it. I liked the descriptions, the flow and the encouragement through out. A couple of problems: you have 2 points-of-view, the MC and then Peter's. This clouds the clarity of the piece. It might sharpen the piece to do less describing or telling and more showing. You will hear this often but sometimes it is the word limit that makes it difficult. Hang in there and keep writing. You will go from strength to strength.
This is an encouraging story. it's not always easy to lean on God but how wonderful that he is always there.