The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a nice piece with interesting characters. I did notice in the first paragraph you used the word hear. I was confused if you really meant here or hear as either would got the sentence. In cases like that you might want to try rewording the sentence like Come here! Or come, hear and see what...

I liked how the story moved Story moved at the right pace. The message was perfect! How sad that today people do have to scrounge the dumpster. Nice message.
Fine bit of story writing that became stronger once you ventured into dialog.

The piece could use a bit of grammatical editing.

Excellent storytelling.
Aside from minor grammatical errors, this story is a hit in my book. You told it well, with a nice twist added in at the end. Very enjoyable read.