The Official Writing Challenge
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06/02/11
This is such a sad situation that happens in too many households--Christian or not.

Well told. I think you wanted to say he; instead of, we in the last sentence.
06/06/11
Like Bonnie, I agree, this is such a sad situation that marriages encounter. Such an easy sin to fall into and so many lives are effected. Thanks for sharing! God bless!
This is a good story with a great
Message. You do have a few errors that a good proofreader would catch. I like your characters and the dialog feels real


06/09/11
I like that you wrote the wife to be so strong. She didn't lose control. She was turning to God. He was her strength. It is a good story. I'd love to hear more and yes it was sad and scary too. Your talk of following the heart when it is following God vs. chasing whatever the flesh wants was explained quite well. Keep up the writing:)
This is a good story. I appreciate the moral, that “following your heart” isn’t always the best thing to do. You showed this very well; so much better than simply being told. Thanks for sharing this.