The Official Writing Challenge
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My own mom had a class called daisies that I was a part of, so you brought back some fun memories. Overall this was good, but I did nottice a couple of things.

Someone on the message boards here at FW pointed out recently that too many adjectives in a row actually work against eachother. A few times you put two or three together in a row; the sentences would have more impact with the use of only one strong adjective instead. I also noted that in the last sentence of the second to last paragaph you used the word 'just' three times. Maybe 'just' leave it out? ;)

I really liked your last line though, about running barefoot with your daisies. It tied the whole flower theme together nicely!
What sweet memories. I'm so glad you shared them with us! I also like how you wrapped it up. Great entry!
This is a super entry. The interest in your story never flagged. I must congratulate you on doing a fine and much needed job.
Linda, this was so sweet and with a little editing to tighten up the flow, it would have done even better than it actually did. But really, it was delightful and ranked 10th in the Level 1 list, which is very good. You also ranked 37th overall, out of a total of 145 entries. So give yourself a pat on the back and be encouraged.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)