The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a nice job showing what a sister might sound like and do during a squabble
12/02/10
Good job describing a sisterly tiff. Be aware of how often you use a character's name in dialogue. Read it out loud and see if the repetition is necessary. If not, you can free up some words to add to your story! Fun idea.
12/05/10
Your story spoke to me. My husband has a poker face so I never know what he's thinking. That's not good. But my face is an open book for all to read--not good either. This challenge has caused me to think I need to work on my facial expressions so I express more joy and love, not anger, pain or sadness. Thanks for your message.
12/08/10
Interesting dialogue and just like sisters. I suggest you not begin each sentence with the person's name. Good job.