The Official Writing Challenge
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Parts of thiscould be my story. I still miss my mom too and call out to her. You did a good job pulling my emotions into your story.
What a sweet, loving conversation.

You may consider dropping the first exchange and move right into the main one.

Loved the gentle voice in this!
I liked your title and the premise of your work. I also liked the reflection that said the daughter wanted direction and wished for the physical presence of the mother to actually stop her from doing what she wanted to do, because she knew in heart that it was wrong. Very profound. You gave the mother a very sweet/tender and loving voice.
A nice reminder for us to have these conversations with our loved ones today.

I'd suggest breaking up the all-dialogue last section with some action, description, or dialogue tags to help us to know and visulaize the characters better. And one line seemed to suggest that the mother is now an angel in heaven, a common misconception.

I like the word 'wistfully' in your title--it works perfectfully for this lovely story.
Unique and touching approach to the topic. It conveys a common wish that we'd said and done more in response to those mothers who loved us so much. Keep writing!
Congratulations for placing 9th in your level!