The Official Writing Challenge
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09/19/05
Cute!
09/20/05
Cute, however, the 4th. and 6th. stanzas revert to 1st. person and the balance of the poem is 3rd person, makes for an uncomfortable jump.
09/20/05
Hey, this is really cute! Very peppy!
Hate to see the poor little guys that inspired this! Now they know not to mess with you! lol Very fun take on the topic! Could almost see you doing your twirly little dance as you celebrate victory over your little adversary!
09/22/05
It's fun, fresh and awesome. Need just a little tweak to make it specifically Christian though. Ewww... I won't be sleeping to hot tonight though...
I really like this.... are you in advertising?

Mmmmm....maybe theres a career option here :)
09/23/05
LOL- great!!
09/27/05
Pam, I actually liked this. I thought it was a very cute, but kind of "icky" take on the topic - very out of the box (we had two "bug's points of view, but no roach motels). I've left a post on the FaithWriters' message boards about comments made on recent entries about the christian point of view. That just means that the hero of the piece shouldn't be doing something that is against Christian beliefs, and getting away with it. Or have a message that contradicts Christian beliefs. This was just a bit of creative writing and a bit of fun that didn't fall outside the guidelines. Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)