The Official Writing Challenge
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09/12/05
Well written! You brought her thoughts out in such a real, presonal way. thank you!
Well done, one of my favorites I've read so far!Curious if it was written by a senior or a younger author who placed themselves (and the reader) into the mind of the elderly.
09/13/05
I don't know how I feel about this. Do old people really think like that? It seems like such a stereotype. It could be a little bit less... uh, stereotypical... but otherwise good.
09/13/05
I like it--the cranky exterior hiding a sweet woman with precious memories. Well written.
09/14/05
I like how you carried the daisies throughout the story. It was a thread that weaved it together. If this is your personal story, then your writing skills you have not lost. I think your writing is almost ready for the next level of the challenge.
I maintain that some old people DO think like this...they treasure the goodness of life rather than become embittered by loss. My mother-in-law was once such person; Mrs. Johnson reminds me of her.

Thanks for calling us to live fully and treasure the memories while we can. I understand how easy it would be to feel put off by artificial activity - bingo and such - although I also want Mrs. Johnson to accept her current position and the best it has to offer her!

Actually, daisies are my favorite flower, too - and were even my wedding flower.

This is well done in that it leaves me thinking about what memories I will have treasured up as my life draws to a close. Thank you for such a thought provoking piece.
Ah, very poignant, Laurie. Like Beth, it reminds me of my mother in so many ways. During the time she was in a nursing home, her body had failed, but her mind was very clear. That was a difficult time. She did feel in many ways like Ethel in your story. Beautifully done!
09/16/05
Daisies make me smile too! I loved your story. Hopefully, one day she will feel like making a basket or two and make more memories.
09/21/05
Laurie, this was a lovely entry and it rated well with the judges as well - making it into the semi-finals. Well done! With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)