The Official Writing Challenge
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Was the typo deliberate? I had to smile at the Opps vs the OOPS. Poor Brendon, I think he really does need the sleep. I hope he made it to the breakfast on time.
01/25/10
Fun story--I love that crotchety old man!

The pacing in the last half was great--I did feel that the first few paragraphs were a bit bogged down with background and other details.

I've started a thread in the message boards specifically for Beginner and Intermediate writers, and I'd love to have you stop by. http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewforum.php?f=67

Great application of this week's topic--I really enjoyed this.
I enjoyed this, whether your misspelling of "Oops" was deliberate or not. The first half was a little slow, with perhaps too much background information, but your characters' dialogue was very good and I could just see the old man on the trolley. Well done.