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TITLE: The Fairy's Gambol | Previous Challenge Entry
By Rachel Dorsey
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Hidden from the sky above under the shade of the treetops
The sound of birds flurrying from branches to branches
Warbles, mimicries, tweet-tweet, chirps like notes in a song
Leaves falling all around her like the drifting snow in winter
“Be careful of the rocks,” the soft chirping reached her ear
She slowly turned to her back, brown eyes surveying the scene
The pretty fairy with the brown locks giggled, curious as a cat
Her wings neatly folded in two pleats behind her shoulder bone
Shadows flickered, trembled, and stretched on the forest floor
A lone rabbit with white fur and blinking black eyes hopped
In front of her, and then waited for his companion to catch up
She leaned over to pat the white rabbit and heard it whisper
“Watch out,” before it scampered away with its friend
The tiny fairy shook her head, picked up a twig, and walked
Over a big hill, through a fell wood stump, around a curve
Going up the cliff side, the fairy flitted here and there until
She spied a splash of water, felt the cool breeze on her wings
“Water!” The fairy squealed, “I’m thirsty!”
A mad dash she did, and did it so well, she was a tiny blur
In her hurry to see the water, the path narrowed to a ledge
Where her feet went over the dark moss leading to the waterfall
She, fairy-girl, clapped hands, twirled and skipped
In her excitement, she did not spy the outcrop of wet rocks
A sudden slip did she take and with a cry, she fell
“Ow!” She whimpered, in a daze, lying on the rocks
She felt the spray of water on her forehead, sighing to herself
Skinned knee, a bruised chin, and her dignity slightly askew
The sky above finally in view, she glanced upwards
The world above past the treetops, out of the Forest, to the sky
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P.S. Definitely quirky!
I wanted just another stanza or two, to show the Fairy's remorse for not heeding the warnings.
I've started a class in the FaithWriters forums for Beginner and Intermediate writers. I'd love to see you there--look for "Jan's Writing Basics".
This is an outstanding poem, rich in imagery and fine word choices.
Keep on writing!