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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sightseeing (08/08/05)
With binoculars in hand the old woman peered over the railing at the mountainous view. Her skin was worn and leathery. Her long thinning gray hair billowed in the wind as she raised the binoculars to eye level to catch what she thought may have been an eagle in the distance; her step had caused small rocks to roll over the edge of the cliff.

“Be careful” her aging husband spoke softly to her
“I don’t want to loose you” he said.

She felt a swelling in her chest just hearing the appreciation for her in his voice. Her mind rolled back to years before her body felt like a tattered sheet of paper. Fragile and discolored from time; and like that sheet of paper her life had been touched by many. She had given much of who she was away. Though tattered and weathered there was still room for script to be written. She opened her mouth and told her husband how much she loved him. She smiled and the wrinkles seemed to increase around her eye, and mouth.

“Ah there it is!” she said aloud. “My friend the eagle”
she had spent most of her life trying to emulate the majestic bird. She tried to live spiritually high in the cliffs. She had tried to find the wind of God and ride on the current rather than to exhaust herself flapping her wings. She had learned to stir her nest when children had needed that nudge.

“Thank you Albert, for this trip of a lifetime, you promised me, it only took 42 years
but you made it good”

“I love you”
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M'Kayla Kelly
08/19/05
I like the characterization of the old lady…more please!
Shari Armstrong 
08/19/05
Very sweet :)
Donnah Cole
08/20/05
I really liked your description of the old lady and her spirituality compared to an eagle. Watch the spelling of lose (as in don't lose your wallet) and loose (as in the belt is loose around your waist).
Debra Brand 
08/20/05
I liked this story. Would like to hear more.
Julianne Jones
08/22/05
"Her mind rolled back to years before her body felt like a tattered sheet of paper. Fragile and discolored from time; and like that sheet of paper her life had been touched by many. ... there was still room for script to be written." This painted such a vivid picture! I would have liked to have seen the link with the eagle expanded and made into more of a story. Keep writing!