The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/09
Very well written! I like how you led up to the contents of the note gradually...letting us see the emotions first. The ending clinched it.
10/10/09
Well done--the wound in the hand was a superb metaphor.

There were a few comma faults and a minor tense shift in the 5th paragraph, but those didn't really interfere with the fine quality of your writing.

I was so "into" this that I actually cringed when she cut herself!
10/11/09
Her hurt, wounds were so deep and yet so exposed. Mixed with pain I sensed unbelief, and hopelessness. We are weakened at the sight of blood and yet we must look to Christ's shed blood for strength. Thanks for these reminders!
10/15/09
this is very good. I love the idea of using the potatoes and preparing them to devlop the storyline. I think this should be on the winners board .. lets hope that the judges agree!