The Official Writing Challenge
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Very well written! I like how you led up to the contents of the note gradually...letting us see the emotions first. The ending clinched it.
Well done--the wound in the hand was a superb metaphor.

There were a few comma faults and a minor tense shift in the 5th paragraph, but those didn't really interfere with the fine quality of your writing.

I was so "into" this that I actually cringed when she cut herself!
Her hurt, wounds were so deep and yet so exposed. Mixed with pain I sensed unbelief, and hopelessness. We are weakened at the sight of blood and yet we must look to Christ's shed blood for strength. Thanks for these reminders!
this is very good. I love the idea of using the potatoes and preparing them to devlop the storyline. I think this should be on the winners board .. lets hope that the judges agree!