The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 613 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
10/08/09
You have good description which made envisioning this scene easy.
10/08/09
Moving..thank you
10/11/09
Excellent image at the very end!

FYI: "Bible" should always be capitalized, as the title of a book.

This managed to be sweet, not maudlin, and I enjoyed your writing style.
10/16/09
you definitely captured both characters well. congrats.
10/16/09
This story has a very authentic feel to it, as if this is real life experience. If so, I am sorry for the loss...if not, it is an excellent telling of a bittersweet story. Congratulations on your level placement.
10/17/09
Wow--what a powerful ending. Brougnt tears to my eyes.

Congratulations on your win, Bill. You must be thrilled! :0)

10/21/09
So glad your MC had such faith and was able to witness, even as she approached death. Congratulations on winning with this touching story.