The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/09
Great emotions and analogy! It helps the reader if you leave and extra space between paragraphs.
Intersting story..Keep writing!
10/11/09
A good reminder that we should not let our emotions affect our actions.

Some of your sentence constructions and word choices seemed a bit puzzling or confusing, and I'm not sure why you sometimes used the underscore.

I like your title!