The Official Writing Challenge
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09/12/09
Let me see now . . . there are a few . . . maybe, even a fair number of less than desirable . . . oh, what difference! . . . I love your story, almost more than your ability to tell it. This is nonstop . . . got to know what’s next . . . persuasive, snappy, topic-driven writing. Excuse, me . . . I think I’ll do myself a favor and go and read it, again. Bryan. 12Sept09Sat.
09/14/09
Ohhh...so sad. You showed the emotions very well. We don't like to think of this type of childhood, but it is too real in many young lives.
Thank you for reminding us to reach out in love to those who are suffering.
09/16/09
You have a great story telling ability. Your technical writing elements, like where to start new paragraphs etc, could use some review. I enjoyed reading your story and look forward to reading more from you.