The Official Writing Challenge
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Aw I really liked this story! =)
LOL...that was so sweet!
This is a sweet story, and SO true... often children think they're ready to do things, and then discover (through experience) that they're not. I really liked how the father handled this realization. I also appreciated the hints about the deep love between the father and mother. Great job!
This is a very good story--outstanding for beginners level. Very good job with showing, not telling, and with characterization. You also did a great job with the setting.

There are a few minor mechanical errors--write out numerals like "three", and the spelling of "papa"...but none of those interfered in the least with your very well-written story.
This is an incredibly well written piece, especially for this level. Fantastic story line, with well developed characters; hard to do with the word count. Exceptional!
So many things I like about this story - and it has it all, too: excitement, adventure, danger, romance... wonderful entry.
This was really very good. I enjoyed the fact that several different things went on all at once- kept the reader engaged to see what happened next. Well done.
Please Mamma, no kissin' and fussin' in front of the men...loved this line Joni! So typical little boyish.
A few minor errors, and might could use a little stronger sentence to start off with.
Really enjoyed the cowboy/ranch theme, right up my alley in reading! :-) Well written to topic as well.
Good use of italics to imply inner thoughts and on the whole your dialogue flowed smoothly.
I wasn't convinced by the line "The way they looked at each other" namely, that a child of this age would understand the look or that he would recognise it as something unusual.
And although I read a good deal about the boy's actions on the prairie, I didn't really feel that I got inside his head.
So there you have three dollops of red ink. But your story really is good and I look forward to seeing how it ranks at the end of the week.
What a great job. I really felt like I was there.
This was a great story. I love your use of italics. It helped seperate what was actually being said from what the mother was only thinking. The story feels so true.
Congratulations for your second place win on your level. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. I was drawn into the story, and felt like I was right there with your MC.
I found this interesting and believable as a "rite of passage" type story--except Kenny wasn't quite ready for that just yet. Hats off to you with your 2nd place ranking with this cute story.
Absolutely lived this realistic story! The dialogue and emotions came through loud and clear!