The Official Writing Challenge
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Sounds like a typical weekend with teenage boys. The details like the stale pizza and the pepsi were good, adding some great snatches of reality to make this more believable. Good job.
The conversation and attitudes were very realistic. Enjoyed the scenes you described.
This story comes to life with dialog. Sounds like real Teens in real Family life to me. Like Teens, there's more training needed. But while I read this, I was longing for a Pizza!!!