The Official Writing Challenge
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A little obvious with the mother knows best cliche, but the ending does carry a good surprise twist. I guessed that something big was going to happen, just not that Emma would die.

There's a little bit of confusion in the beginning, I wasn't sure what was description or what was Rachel's thoughts, try some italics next time for her thoughts-and that should clear it up nicely. italics

Good job!
Good story and message. Thanks for sharing.
You've got the craft of a real story here. In the narration you have a third person point of view. In the dialog you have first person point of view. I think you'd bring it to life by writing both from the first person as if you are the Teen girl, yourself, experiencing the tragedy. Tell the whole story through your experience.