The Official Writing Challenge
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06/02/09
Interesting twist at the end.

I like to think that our first moments in heaven will be unmistakable, though, as we worship the King...

I like the moody atmosphere of this gothic-like story. Good writing!
06/02/09
Very Interesting!
You showed the emotions very well through your dialogue.
The surprise at the end was perfect.