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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)
Imagine this
telephone at corner shop
wooden spinning top
string and wringing mop
raggedy doll
erectors tall
skirts to the floor
world at war
speak when spoken to
how do you do

Imagine this
telephone attached to wall
moving wetting doll
rubber bouncing ball
picture box with sound
records spinning round
board games ready
going steady
rayon dress
war time press

Imagine this
toiling moms and dads
hemp knotting fads
touch tone pads
pony cars
race for the stars
mini skirts
tie-dyed shirts
drive-in make out
scream and shout

Imagine this
free to roam telephone
pets made of stone
games played alone
family size van
deep summer tan
chair of beans
bell bottom jeans
wash and wear
truth or dare

Imagine this
giant picture screens
political scenes
collectable beans
phone in pocket
pop and lock it
plug in cars
meeting in bars
real estate bids
smart mouth kids

Imagine this
lap top information flow
cloned things grow
debts to owe
optional fuel
global rule
station in space
surgical face
digital making
God forsaking
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Jan Ackerson
05/08/09
Superb poetry!

The "in and out" is inferred; I hope the judges were able to see it! I enjoyed this very, very much. My favorite on this level so far. Love the structure, the meter and rhyme scheme, the imagery...I could go on and on.
Dennis Ricci
05/08/09
Flowing rhythm, I like the syncopated feel when I read it aloud. Good word choices, I especially like the three-word cadence. The imagery evokes a fond "memory lane" experience, and the last line makes a powerful statement that as human progress advances God is more and more left out. Well done!
Gregory Kane
05/13/09
It took me a couple of goes to see what you were doing here. And I'm not sure that I ever saw the topic, inferred or otherwise. But the creativity is excellent and some wonderful choices for the different time periods. Most enjoyable.
Janice Fitzpatrick
05/14/09
Your style is great and this flowed as fast as the years have spun by like an old wooden top or lies fabricated by the mdeia.:0)Good job!
Janice Fitzpatrick
05/14/09
Oops, meant to type media,hehe-I need to grab my reading glases-there.:0 Congratulations on your win!Great writing hon!
Eliza Evans 
05/14/09
Just FANTASTIC!!! So pitch perfect! LOVE IT! LOVE IT!

I look forward to reading more from you. :)

Congratulations on your EC!!
Lollie Hofer 
05/14/09
What a wonderful use of this week's topic. The pace of this poem was fast and fun. Very original. Congratulations on your well-deserved recognition.
Kathy Gronau
05/14/09
Congratulations!!!!!
What a stroll down memory lane!
Loved it
Marita Thelander 
05/15/09
I enjoyed this very much. Congratulations. very artistic way to show the topic of how things come in and go out.
Chely Roach
05/15/09
Awesome! Congrats on your EC!
Rhonda Schrock
05/19/09
I felt like I was in a dusty old antique store, crammed with treasures. You captured that scene in a nutshell. Good job!