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03/05/09
Wow! What a change in circumstances! I think I saw it coming. He seemed to tiake the news rather calmly I thought.
03/06/09
Nice twist to the ending, and the dialogue kept the story moving and interesting.

The reaction by the son seemed a little too calm for what he just found out. And I kept waiting for God to come back into the story.

Good dialogue...nice job with the topic.
Very interesting perspective. It left me wanting to know more.
03/09/09
great beginning, good dialogue and action. I was expecting more action, emotion and conversation between son and father. I also saw how God the father trust the drawing power of his love to bring us to His presence.
03/09/09
This is a neat story. It did seem strange to me, though, that the emperor seemed vaguely familiar, then they were speaking in very familiar tones.
Interesting story. Well done.