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Wow! What a change in circumstances! I think I saw it coming. He seemed to tiake the news rather calmly I thought.
Nice twist to the ending, and the dialogue kept the story moving and interesting.

The reaction by the son seemed a little too calm for what he just found out. And I kept waiting for God to come back into the story.

Good dialogue...nice job with the topic.
Very interesting perspective. It left me wanting to know more.
great beginning, good dialogue and action. I was expecting more action, emotion and conversation between son and father. I also saw how God the father trust the drawing power of his love to bring us to His presence.
This is a neat story. It did seem strange to me, though, that the emperor seemed vaguely familiar, then they were speaking in very familiar tones.
Interesting story. Well done.